One day l went up a tall big fat Mountain. l went with my cousin and we saw lots of animal poop.
Because it was a farm. It was a big Mountain my cousin was on a bike adventure.
His bike had lots of cool colours . We stayed on the mountain until night time .
His bike had lots of cool colours . We stayed on the mountain until night time .
Hi Achilles,
ReplyDeleteIt’s me Isitolo. I like how your story made me laugh with happiness.
Maybe next time check your work.
Keep up the Good work!
Hi Achilles,
ReplyDeleteIt’s me Everly I like how you went to a farm on a mountain. It made me laugh when you said “Dog Poop”. Maybe next time you could put the writing to fit on the page.
Hi Achilles
ReplyDeleteit's me Alf I liked your writing because it is funny and interesting how your cousin haves an colourful bike and when that took a poop and I hope you learn hips of stuff like the padake. Keep up wonderful work Achilles.
thak you all of you
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